Environmental Writing

As part of our 'Animal Inquiry' we watched a cool video that showed some clever Gannets catching their prey. Then we wrote a poem about what they do using similes, adjectives and adverbs to make our writing more interesting to read and colourful. Here's a couple of finished products for you to enjoy - just click on the picture to have a closer look.

Descriptive Piece

(S.D.)  Two eagles perching on the dead dry branch with sharp gold powerful claws and fearless fiery eyes.  They have a pointy sharp beak, white head and a big brown feathery body.  They look cruel and deadly as they wait to attack their next prey.     

Ben's Day at School

(J.H.)  I liked how Ben was so furry like he was a big pillow.

(R.C.)  When Ben visited my school and I opened the door he jumped on me and he could do lots of cool tricks.

(L.S.)  I liked Ben's visit because Mr Hayward's dog did really amazing tricks.

(O.R.)  I liked Ben's visit because he is amazing and he is very fluffy and very good.  He is the best dog in the world!

(K.C.)  I liked Ben's visit because he showed us cool tricks.

(M.P.)  Ben was so cute that when I got home I begged mum and dad for a golden retriever.

(R.W.)  He was so cute and as fluffy as a teddy bear.

(C.M.)  I liked it when Ben licked my hand.

(S.D.)  I liked Bennie because he was kind and friendly.

(R.F.)  When I came in Ben was doing amazing tricks.

(B.C.)  It was fun when Ben was at school.

(H.M.)  Ben was cute and cuddly.

(M.B.)  I liked Ben's visit because he did spectacular tricks.

(K.F.)  My favourite trick was when Ben did a roly poly.

(M.T.)  I used to be scared of big dogs but Ben made me not so scared anymore.

(J.W.)  I liked Ben because he was kind to children.

(J.L.)  I liked Ben because he was so cute and fluffy like a soft woolly sheep.

Our crazy and fun writing piece...

'HELP! my babysitter's a monkey'

(E.H.)  Today my dad and mum got me a babysitter.  It was a monkey.  I tried to warn my dad that it was a monkey but he did not hear me.  When I got inside I saw him switch all the taps on and it was a swimming pool.  I got freaked out.  I saw everything get sucked up the chimney except the couch.  I swam to the couch and pushed it away and I went up into the sky up the chimney.  Then I fell on the car and it broke.  Mum and dad came back and we ate the monkey for dinner and I never got a babysitter again. 

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