Descriptive Writing Piece

We have been talking about descriptive/environmental writing in class; and have linked it with our current Inquiry about animals.  We enjoyed talking about Leopards and how they love to relax up in trees.  Here's some of our writing about this picture...

(J.H.)  The sleepy Leopard lay quietly up in his huge tree.  His long firm tail is very spotty and looks like a snake camouflaged in the tree.  He lies knackered up in his tree balancing cleverly.  He rests from his big hunt and from dragging his heavy prey up so high.  He lies in the shade and enjoys the soft gentle breeze on his body.  He looks really comfortable and safe away from danger.

(R.C.)  The Leopard went to hunt for food then dragged it up his favourite tree.  He was lying there lazily from that big meal he had.  Sleeping happily in the nice cool breeze.  He enjoys the cool air whooshing around him and over his fur.

(R.W.)  The spotty sleepy Leopard is hiding sneakily from other big cats after a huge meal he hunted.  Wanting to feel breeze under the big brown and green tree he loves.  Sleeping lazily and very tired.  Safely resting and happy balanced on the branch.

(J.S.)  The Leopard has a long swishy spotty tail when he is asleep.  The green leafy tree is  making the cool breeze go through his fluffy fur.

(E.H.)  The Leopard lay in the shady tree after a big meal with the cool breeze blowing against him.  He is really tired and hot, hot, hot from running in the sun and from bringing his food back.